Audience Feedback from RC 1

From our first rough cut we have gained some feedback on which we have thought about and considered changing from our first cut. Some of these changes are experiments such as editing and others are changes that for sure need to happen due to the lack of footage in some areas so more shot variety is needed in some key areas
Feedback comments from sources of our target audience:

Steady Shots
Negatives

• Start on the train in between the chairs is shaky and needs to be edited 
• When the old man is walking past the shops with the walking stick in hand
• Club scenes are shaky but it has a good effect in a way but shouldn't be used as much

Positives

• Didn't see an unsteady shot and would be excellent if the nightclub shots were reasonably steady and if the shakiness was on purpose
• Steady shots throughout an all round good performance
• Good steady shots when the break dancing is in Slow-Mo 

Framing

Negatives

• End shot feet were out of the way and ruined the shot
• The dropping the tissues didn't exactly work that well so maybe another angle or frame for that one
• Dancing in the streets the framing was off due to the walls being too much in shot
• Average and some good shots

Positives

• The framing in the break dancing in the streets worked really well and was a good use of the urban environmental view to the song.
• The break dancing with the dutch angle worked extremely well 
• Good use of the framing with the police car in the shots

Shot Variety

Negatives

• Close ups needed of the iconic features of the old man
• More long shots and extreme close ups of the dancing scenes and in the club scenes
• More shots needed of the old man in the normal old man mode

Positives

• Alot of good shot variety within the whole video
• Good shot variety and a good range of different angles and locations
• Good use of shot variety in the urban town area and the dancing but needs a bit more maybe

Appropriate Material

Negatives

• People looking at the camera at the zebra crossing and all the cars at the begining  
• Need shots of the old man in the club to show the narrative continuity only one shot of being ignored need more
• Not convincing that he is an old man
• Club scene is too early

Positives

• The club scene worked well with the mad party thing 
• Suited the style and genre of the music and the style of the original artist
• Works well and most of it makes sense and you get some sense of verisimilitude

Mise-en-Scene

Negatives

• Seems like two videos in the club and in the street
• Verisimilitude lost on the type of shoes used
• Trousers seem different with the lightings of the weather 
• People looking at the camera from the public

Positives

• The club scene works well and suits the style of the videos and son choice
• The mise en scene from the sort of urban town feel works well 
• The way in which the character is in a lot of random different locations works well